Friday, June 29, 2012

Going up...



Vanaja, back from her shift, stepped into the elevator and gasped.

Rakshit, of 4th floor, stood swaying, his eyes closed. It was past midnight. Vanaja knew he sleep-walked; only hadn’t expected him here. She stood quietly.

Thud. Damn power cut.  The elevator went black. Thankfully, the power returned soon enough.

Only, Rakshit wasn’t there.

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15 comments:

  1. Erratic Thoughts8:55 AM

    :-O :-O
    Ooooh!Oh God, now where did this fellow go?!!First he walks in sleep n then he is gayab,Poor Vanaja!



    Small Correction Sri: You mentioned two different names Vanaja/Varija...

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  2. phatichar9:11 AM

    ET: Hehe...thanks junior - corrected now :P

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  3. Anonymous9:32 AM

    Oooooo!
    I love the way you name it - the literal and the hidden meanings and how you play with the dynamics of words and create that effect :)

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  4. My Era10:23 AM

    Now that was scary....though I got the impression that maybe Vanaja was just imagining it all after a hectic shift at work.

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  5. Shreya11:29 AM

    Thud? Why was there a thud?!?!

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  6. Bikram3:10 PM

    oh where did he go .. did he fall or what

    spooky
    Bikram's

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  7. sumitra3:22 PM

    Ack! I actually went like "Ack!" at the end. :D

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  8. Tongue-fu Lady3:37 PM

    lol..kuch bhi..

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  9. Uma8:32 AM

    I'd have had a heart attack..poor Vanaja..how did she cope??
    Btw, what happened to the :other side..." am waiting for the redux...the story still lingers in my mind..:-)

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  10. phatichar12:07 PM

    Toffee: Hehe...thx :)

    My Era: Hmmm..could be :P

    MSM: You suddenly reminded me of this. :)

    Shreya: Ever been in a lift when it suddenly stopped? :)

    Bikram: Well, now that we've to ask Mr. Rakshit :P

    Sumitra: Yikes! :P

    TFL: LOL (you mirrored my thoughts once I wrote this)...kabhi kabhi junk food bhi khaana chahiye, nahi? :P

    Uma: Maybe she too 'went' up :D. Ah, 'the other side'...well,you see it's still in redux mode, undergoing some major changes..will put it up soon. :)

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  11. Rohini1:16 AM

    :O leave nothing..will ya???

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  12. the little princess11:58 AM

    oops!! I bet it was a frightday night!

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  13. Srini10:32 PM

    Sleepwalking so bore ho gaya...so he is now also sleep-disapparating :-)...

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  14. phatichar11:10 AM

    Rohu: No.. :p

    princess: :P hehehe..

    Sri: Yes..something to make life interesting..

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  15. Me10:51 AM

    OMG...how do you manage to write things so brilliantly.... it gave me goosebumps as I finished reading it.

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