Monday, November 21, 2005

Well...

They sat at the kitchen table. She munched. He sipped. They didn't speak. Just munched and sipped. She was hungry. He was thirsty. Jussst...munching and sipping. No speaking.

She wiped her mouth with the napkin and cleared her throat. He looked at her. Kept looking.

She bit into her food again. "Mmmhmm, mhhmm?"

He placed the glass down. "Sorry?"

She swallowed hurriedly. Boy, was she hungry.

"I'm sorry. What I meant was, Do you want more?"

He shook his head.

She nodded and went back to her munching. He was done sipping.

He rose.

She sat watching.

He wanted to leave, obviously. He just raised his hand, but didn't wave.

She smiled through her mouthful. Or was it just his imagination?

He left. She munched some more. A few moments later, she stood watching him from the kitchen window. He turned at her one last time and disappeared into the darkness.

She looked down at her bulging tummy and waved her palm on it. The baby moved. She looked into the darkness again.

She wondered if she should tell her sister about the Indian burglar, who didn't have the heart to rob them. After all, this was a country foreign to him as well. Poor guy. She thought about her husband, snoring so lovingly. Should she tell him?

She let it be. For now, she wanted to rob the entire kitchen off all the goodies. Boy, this guy's one helluva eater, she thought, looking down again.

22 comments:

d4u said...

Wow..this is called kahaani mein twist!!

Prerona said...

I think i missed something. samjha nehi. will have to re read it again and come back.

Parna said...

:) not macabre for a change

√úbermaniam said...

Poor prero. Such innocence. Arre baba, what you didn't understand. Such a sweet tale. Like prero. :-)

KJ said...

sweet story....

for a change.....

:-))

KJ

phatichar said...

d4u: nai? :)

Prerona: phir se padh, bachchi, phir se padh...:)

Parna: hmmm...quite true...

daily: :) prero? what say?

KJ: :) thx ma'am

Full2 Faltu said...

Nice! Short! and Surprising

Punds

Akruti said...

Can someone explain me the story plz:( Ok,let me go read it again.Huh

Aditya Bidikar said...

Bizarre, and very nice.

But I can't get over 'snoring so lovingly'. Was that intentional?

phatichar said...

Punds: welcome! :) and thx...

Akruti: wht...? ok, go read it once again, am sure u'll get it this time :)

Aditya Bidikar: :) yeah, normally even ur husband's snoring eventually becomes a very comforting sound (don't say that to my wife tho') :) I'm only assuming it to be so...welcome, btw...

Rita said...

Wow! That is a good story. For a change it is long one and not a 55 word story that are so common in blogoshphere :D

phatichar said...

rita: thx..yeah, I normally go beyond the 55 words, but like to stick to short-shorts, if u know wht i mean. and hey, thx for dropping by :)

Arunima said...

Original?

But who snores lovingly?

phatichar said...

arunima: Well, not very fond of putting up someone else's entire work up here, unless it's a small quote (then I'd credit him/her for it) :) so, yeah, you could call this original.

Snoring lovingly? Oh, don't take that too seriously

It's been a long time since you were here..how'r u?

Accidental Fame Junkie said...

Is this a fad or something? This is the second or the thirs story I have come across in the blogosphere which did the "she" and "he" thing: narrating the story in the 3rd person with twist in the end?

shub said...

so cute! :)
and i agree with parna,not macabre for a change! :p going soft eh? :p

phatichar said...

junkie: oh, it's just a coincidence...a lot of my stories here read that way..but hey, you brought up a good observation..maybe we in the blogosphere think alike...

shub: welcome girl...long time.. :) dont be too sure, my next one might just chill spines once again..

GratisGab said...

LOL! What a take! I never for the world imagined you would change my innocent story into this :D

Love it!

phatichar said...

gabby: glad u liked it. :)

Priya Iyer said...

this is so damn cute!! very different from your usual ones.. :)

phatichar said...

priya thanx :) yeah, got the idea from another blogger's situation. (long story, will tell ya someday)

Soumya said...

Muhahaha.

This was cute :)