Friday, June 29, 2012

Going up...



Vanaja, back from her shift, stepped into the elevator and gasped.

Rakshit, of 4th floor, stood swaying, his eyes closed. It was past midnight. Vanaja knew he sleep-walked; only hadn’t expected him here. She stood quietly.

Thud. Damn power cut.  The elevator went black. Thankfully, the power returned soon enough.

Only, Rakshit wasn’t there.

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16 comments:

Erratic Thoughts said...

:-O :-O
Ooooh!Oh God, now where did this fellow go?!!First he walks in sleep n then he is gayab,Poor Vanaja!



Small Correction Sri: You mentioned two different names Vanaja/Varija...

phatichar said...

ET: Hehe...thanks junior - corrected now :P

kismitoffeebar said...

Oooooo!
I love the way you name it - the literal and the hidden meanings and how you play with the dynamics of words and create that effect :)

My Era said...

Now that was scary....though I got the impression that maybe Vanaja was just imagining it all after a hectic shift at work.

Mystical Skeptical Me said...

I had a vivid imagination of Vanaja being a man-eater :P :P :D

Sorry, couldn't help! Awesomely you write!! :D :D

Shreya said...

Thud? Why was there a thud?!?!

Bikramjit said...

oh where did he go .. did he fall or what

spooky
Bikram's

sumitra said...

Ack! I actually went like "Ack!" at the end. :D

Tongue-fu Lady said...

lol..kuch bhi..

Uma said...

I'd have had a heart attack..poor Vanaja..how did she cope??
Btw, what happened to the :other side..." am waiting for the redux...the story still lingers in my mind..:-)

phatichar said...

Toffee: Hehe...thx :)

My Era: Hmmm..could be :P

MSM: You suddenly reminded me of this. :)

Shreya: Ever been in a lift when it suddenly stopped? :)

Bikram: Well, now that we've to ask Mr. Rakshit :P

Sumitra: Yikes! :P

TFL: LOL (you mirrored my thoughts once I wrote this)...kabhi kabhi junk food bhi khaana chahiye, nahi? :P

Uma: Maybe she too 'went' up :D. Ah, 'the other side'...well,you see it's still in redux mode, undergoing some major changes..will put it up soon. :)

Rohu said...

:O leave nothing..will ya???

the little princess said...

oops!! I bet it was a frightday night!

Sri said...

Sleepwalking so bore ho gaya...so he is now also sleep-disapparating :-)...

phatichar said...

Rohu: No.. :p

princess: :P hehehe..

Sri: Yes..something to make life interesting..

Me said...

OMG...how do you manage to write things so brilliantly.... it gave me goosebumps as I finished reading it.