The blue Indica was at the traffic signal at around 10 pm.
“Sir, toy gun for your kids?” said a hawker
“Sir, toy gun for your kids?” said a hawker
“Don’t want.”
“I insist,” the hawker said, pulling the trigger.
****
From the shadows, he watched the traffic pile up angrily behind
the stationery Indica. He fished out his mobile phone.
“It’s done.”
****
19 comments:
Gory 55
Sirjee, crisp and to the point! nice.. btw long absence?
Awesome! Nice to see you back.
So wat shall I say..?? I strongly feel like saying, "I told you so"...;-)
And about the 55 fictions, "Short and Stunning", literally...;p
Visha: :P
Princess: Thank you..ah yes, been a bit busy lately :)
Sumitra: Thank you, ma'am. :)
Kanthu: LOL..ok ok, you can go ahead and say that.. ;-)
Thanks, pal.
oh wow, reminds me of the contract killer from Kahaani, Bob Biswas :P
TFL: LOL..seriously? Wait, ek minute... :P
wou!! short and sweet! :D
hehe.....agree with Tongue-fu-Lady......It did remind me of Bob Biswas :)
Rohu: :)
CD: *sigh...the powers of bollywood - now Bob Biswas is a benchmark - and here I was, thinking my killers (much older than BB) were deadly. :P :P
Nomoskar.Ami Bob Biswas.Ek minute. ;-)
Slowly shifting to crime fiction? :)
Rahul: :p et tu?
Cmus: shifting? Naah, had only drifted away from it...slowly getting 'back' to it - archives full odilla ansuthe? :)
Comparing your posts to Bollywood would be an insult.
To your posts ofcourse :D
Awesome writing.
hey.. IMO, the story would have been better without the 'From the shadows...' part. That way you could leave the reader wonder whether the hawker was psycho, or he had a 'supari' or something else entirely. :)
Alice: thx...not sure if it's a good idea to puzzle the reader in a 55# thingy in the first place - too little room to play around as it is :p
hmnn....too many contract killers..
Crisp one!
Bloody hell! :D Im so glad i came here
Varsha: hehehe :P
ML: Welcome! Finally.. :)Thanks a lot.
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