Monday, August 06, 2012

Round (and round) trip



Deepa smiled as the bus sped past the beautiful countryside. She loved going on excursions with her students. She couldn’t miss this for the world.

Yeah, but she missed being with them in person, though. Sometimes.

If only she had not drowned in one of the trips…four years ago. She sighed…and then shrugged.

 Oh well…

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19 comments:

Menachery said...

I was wondering how a small post as such cud be eerie!!!, but then well you proved me wrong :)

Keirthana said...

You can do this even with 2 words, can't ya? :P

Keirthana

Me said...

OMG..... seriously...creating this fear and eeriness in such few words....marvelous!!

Zillion Dreams said...

slick and to the point!

was that 55 word fiction? so much to learn from u!

phatichar said...

Menachery: :P

Keirthana: I could.. ;-)

Me: Hehe..thanks..

ZD: :) Thanks..yes, it was.

Soumya said...

Hahaha awesome this :D

Mirage said...

Brilliance, I see in this post.

goingbeyondthepages said...

I can't believe you have made even such a short post scary and that too so convincingly... only you can do that :)

phatichar said...

Soumya: Thank you :P

Mirage: Hehe..thanks, girl.

GBTP: Heheh..thanks. Touched.. :)

Rahul said...

back with so many entries?awesome...:-)

sumitra said...

Maybe you could enter the guinness book for the world's shortest horror story?

Varsha Naik said...

How do you manage to tell the same kind of story in a 1000 different ways?! Hats off

Nirvana said...

My God!! that is the scariest flash fiction I have seen!

phatichar said...

Rahul: My boy! Thanks..yeah, blog diarrhea. Hota hai kabhi kabhi :P. How've ya been? Haven't visited you in a long time - will stop over soon. :)

Sumitra: Ha ha..I like that one. :P

Varsha: :) Thanks. Have no idea really..

Nirvana: :P

Erratic Thoughts said...

Whaaa?!!Like seriously?!Did you just scare us in 55 words?
Scary man!You are just too good :)

Tongue-fu Lady said...

:)

Arch said...

Arey, I hope you write non-scary stuff too :P Nice one!

phatichar said...

ET: :P

TFL: :) :)

Arch: Hmm, that explains why you haven't read my other posts. :P :) Thanks..do drop in when you get time.

Visha said...

I think you need just an animate or inanimate object - to induce spook :)