Monday, September 12, 2005

Long story short...

(I was tagged into this...)

The elevator climbed. He looked at her tall frame. He’d never kissed a tall girl. Not that these ‘man’ things bothered him a lot. But he preferred someone shorter. His hands accidentally brushed her bag, dropping it. She bent.

*******

He unwound the metal string off her neck, easing her onto the floor. Lovely eyes…

21 comments:

Sudipta Chatterjee said...

Why do I get this queer feeling that the man is Mr. Phatichar and the "mi(e)ssy" is the one who tagged you?

Prerona said...

Hmmm.

Cherubin said...

and he has done it again...you always make my eyes pop out after these tales of yours...

phatichar said...

sudipta: my, my...what an imagination. Parna, you reading this?

pre: kyoon re...?

angel: :)

kay said...

lol!that was a cool one yaar...unconventional thinking u have...like it the way it is...savage..rustic..and the refreshing dryness in it is enamouring!

phatichar said...

kay thx pal.. :)

Prerona said...

:( bahut achha hai!

Parna said...

...err firstly, Mr.Chatterjee, kerom aachen? sorry had to say that. Sudipta am the one who tagged Ramana and trust me have not met him let alone...ahem ahem.....

Ramana thanks for going along with it. i was trying to figure out the lines which might/would come in story2. how do you think it will end?

you know story1 and 2 can actually be interlinked. thats what i tried to do when i was writing mine. the building from which the girl jumped, the girl was sitting in the park in front and the old man saw them kissing in the same park. but i guess it was not clear. what with 55 word limit!

nice ones both as usual :)

A Cynic in Wonderland said...

your comment box is maha moody!
Nice!

J said...

lol @ sudipto

KJ said...

as usuakl, story with a twist... :-)

baby doing ok. thanks for asking. howz aayushi doing?

ciao

phatichar said...

cynic: it has it's days i guess....thx :)

j: yeah right :)

kj: :) aayu's fine, as usual..upto her tricks..

phatichar said...

parna: all 3 stories of urs were nippy, and drove a punch! :) hmmm, missed the link somehow..maybe some word that would help us imagine the connection..

GratisGab said...

There he goes again. Killing my sleep! Deliciously. :)

Rhyncus said...

When I first read about the concept at Parna's, I thought of you. :) Even before I got to her tags. Any more up your sleeve yet?

Ash said...

Arrrrgh . Ramana, I did not expect anything less frm you !

Chilling !

phatichar said...

gabby: :)...err, deliciously???

Rhyncus: hey man, long time.. oh i've lots up my sleeve..these ideas just spill out...can't say when tho'.. :)

Ash: :) was, hmm?

Sudipta Chatterjee said...

Uh-oh... ok, change of roles. :) Now, phatichar, howzzat?

manuscrypts said...

u r becoming a serial killer, literally that is :)

shub said...

hmmm...wonder what you are like, in person! i bet uhave three eyes n a 2 horns! :D

phatichar said...

manuscrypts: *scratches head*, hmmmm...wonder which serial did i kill... :)

shub: now you're combining the devil and the god...too much! :) (got it?)

sudipta: either ways, someone gets killed pal, not good... hehehe :)